Precision wrote:comments
Also, if our hero carries a concealed pistol, why does he unload it when he lands in town? Perhaps a good chance to bash idiotic gun laws is being missed there.
Good point. Hmm... that's why there's 2nd and 3rd drafts.
I'm sure most of you wouldn't hardly recognize Alone 3rd draft vs, the 1st.
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Chapter 8 is now available for your reading pleasure.
No shooting in this chapter... but there is a lot of pain.
The words are flowing
Years from now our children and grandchildren living in a 3rd world America will ask "What were you doing on March 21st 2010 and why didn't you stop it?"
--Me
Come check out my blog where I share my crazy sci-fi and fantasy fiction. Alone: King of One
Who says "readingness" isn't a word? Well I think it should be.
Anyway, feedback on the "altercation" between Victor and the reader would be appreciated. You'll see what I mean when you read it.
Years from now our children and grandchildren living in a 3rd world America will ask "What were you doing on March 21st 2010 and why didn't you stop it?"
--Me
Come check out my blog where I share my crazy sci-fi and fantasy fiction. Alone: King of One
Who says "readingness" isn't a word? Well I think it should be.
Anyway, feedback on the "altercation" between Victor and the reader would be appreciated. You'll see what I mean when you read it.
I think there needs to be more to the altercation before the smarty trousers ending to it.
"Those who hammer their guns into plows will plow for those who do not." ~Thomas Jefferson
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Who says "readingness" isn't a word? Well I think it should be.
Anyway, feedback on the "altercation" between Victor and the reader would be appreciated. You'll see what I mean when you read it.
I think there needs to be more to the altercation before the smarty trousers ending to it.
Hmm, I'll think of something. Thanks.
You did continue reading down below right?
Years from now our children and grandchildren living in a 3rd world America will ask "What were you doing on March 21st 2010 and why didn't you stop it?"
--Me
Come check out my blog where I share my crazy sci-fi and fantasy fiction. Alone: King of One
"Those who hammer their guns into plows will plow for those who do not." ~Thomas Jefferson
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Feedback is not only appreciated it's mandatory! So all you lurkers our there let me know what you think. Leaving a comment is easy as falling off a barn and breaking a leg.
Years from now our children and grandchildren living in a 3rd world America will ask "What were you doing on March 21st 2010 and why didn't you stop it?"
--Me
Come check out my blog where I share my crazy sci-fi and fantasy fiction. Alone: King of One
Years from now our children and grandchildren living in a 3rd world America will ask "What were you doing on March 21st 2010 and why didn't you stop it?"
--Me
Come check out my blog where I share my crazy sci-fi and fantasy fiction. Alone: King of One
thats the kind of development I like. it took a while to get where we were going. lovely
"Those who hammer their guns into plows will plow for those who do not." ~Thomas Jefferson
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